Man, my palette choices are just revealed to be horrible in that 4th panel. 3 characters with the same 2 shades of red? I’m terrible at this game
Man, this page beat me up. I think I had too many pages of dialouge I was trying to make work in this 1 page. Oh well…
This is the type of comic that looks like I’m kinda stalling, but I think it is crucial to the proper method of storytelling.
First, I think trying to have natural conversations and transitions is very important. I can do a smash cut if I need to and I think I do make a jump here pretty soon.
Second, passing subtle information is important. This is the first time we learn something about the school: whatever else, it is technically an ‘academy,’ whatever that means.
Also, in writing things like this, I learn things about the character. For instance, from that sports metaphor(?) JQ used in that last panel, I discovered she had been on the girl’s softball team back when she was in high school. And maybe Principal Piebald was the coach? I dunno. Its a subtle thing I’m going to try to use again and see what is there.
Also, EVERYTHING is still foreshadowing!
Man, I dragged my feet on this one. And I’m still not happy with the art on it. But its up now.
So I had a bit of a typo when setting up yesterday’s comic, and made it post on the 19th instead of the 29th, which is why you didn’t see it yesterday. Go check it out if you need to!